OK… I must say that I really enjoyed reading both of these papers. One addresses the deforestation in Haiti, the other one concentrates on air pollution and its effects on lower income neighborhoods, especially in New York. Undoubtedly, Fidel and Lisa are doing an extraordinary job with their paper.
Q1
But now this is my analysis of both papers, first, Fidel’s paper, I found this paper very rich in historical background but I wasn’t able find the thesis of the paper. Unless, the thesis of the paper is: “these restrictive and destructive policies (yet profitable for the perpetrators) have hindered Haiti’s economical ability to develop alternative and sustainable fueling methods that can halt the cutting of trees and use of wood for cooking and fueling.” On the other hand, on Lisa’s paper I am not sure what the thesis is? I think it might be this: “this is a serious issue for the residents of the area because of the effects the pollutants that these facilities produce have on the health of individuals”
Q2 and Q3
The part that captured my attention was at the end of the paper when I started reading about the social conditions of Haitians and I also liked the way Fidel compared Haiti and the Dominican Republic but I don’t understand why the need of doing that when the paper only talks about Haiti.
On Lisa’s paper the part that I found interested is the section where she defied environmental racism and she talks about Harlem especially because I live in that neighborhood. On the other hand, when I read her introduction I had to stop and read it again, I think it needs to be organized
Q4, Q5, and Q6
The acknowledgement of sources is done correctly, Fidel’s paper does not have “human interest story.” Lastly, as I read his paper I did not find any grammatical mistakes, however, since English is not my first language my opinion on this should not be taken as final word. On the other hand, Lisa’s still is underdevelopment so it is hard for me to answer these three questions
Q1
But now this is my analysis of both papers, first, Fidel’s paper, I found this paper very rich in historical background but I wasn’t able find the thesis of the paper. Unless, the thesis of the paper is: “these restrictive and destructive policies (yet profitable for the perpetrators) have hindered Haiti’s economical ability to develop alternative and sustainable fueling methods that can halt the cutting of trees and use of wood for cooking and fueling.” On the other hand, on Lisa’s paper I am not sure what the thesis is? I think it might be this: “this is a serious issue for the residents of the area because of the effects the pollutants that these facilities produce have on the health of individuals”
Q2 and Q3
The part that captured my attention was at the end of the paper when I started reading about the social conditions of Haitians and I also liked the way Fidel compared Haiti and the Dominican Republic but I don’t understand why the need of doing that when the paper only talks about Haiti.
On Lisa’s paper the part that I found interested is the section where she defied environmental racism and she talks about Harlem especially because I live in that neighborhood. On the other hand, when I read her introduction I had to stop and read it again, I think it needs to be organized
Q4, Q5, and Q6
The acknowledgement of sources is done correctly, Fidel’s paper does not have “human interest story.” Lastly, as I read his paper I did not find any grammatical mistakes, however, since English is not my first language my opinion on this should not be taken as final word. On the other hand, Lisa’s still is underdevelopment so it is hard for me to answer these three questions
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Thanks Alex! Good job helping Fidel and Lisa.
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